Not trying to start a riot, but this sounds better than most death metal original recordings, hopefully that is received the right way.
I guess the best judge is if one hears vocals while listening, I do......so congratulations, pretty you got a keeper song......
The only critique of it....the drums seem a bit to busy, which I know is part of the genre.....I don't mix, but I think that the drums need a little less in some parts. This will let the instruments be heard, and the vocal to stick out
Otherwise, great job! It is definitely death metal!